Resume Critique

[dirtboy]

I am generally highly critical of resumes, and after seeing yours on bbzzdd.com and following the link, I must say it is very poorly done. What I see in your resume is someone who hasn't done much, hasn't had a significant impact on the projects or companies he's worked for, but thinks very highly of himself so he disguises his work in big words and carefully crafted vague sentences.

After reading it, I'm not sure what is is you do, what you want to do, or why you are remotely qualified to do whatever that is. Your past work history, rather then impress me, actually makes me think you are a glorified desk jockey. While you might be very intelligent and well qualified for something, and certainly you are based on your education, if this resume came across my desk, it wouldn't take more than 2 minutes before it found the trash.

A resume is about selling yourself to get an interview. The only thing I'm sold on after looking at yours is that I'm ready to look at the next one in the stack.

 

[JJChicken]

Originally posted by: Aharami

Originally posted by: sao123
I love how idiots display their resumee asking for help, but feel the need to blank out their name and contact information... this is probably the stupidest thing you could possibly do.


Lets start with your objective statement... as in its missing.

objective statements are the most useless part of a resume. You already know what the job you're applying to entails; why do you need an objective statement?

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[KKR]

It would help to know what sort of position you are looking for. I would recommend having separate resumes for ibanking, HF's, PE, etc, as they will be looking for different things. Here are some thoughts:

1. Work experience should appear above other relevant skills.
2. Your first two bullets under relevant skills can be condensed and included under education. Just list a few relevant courses- exposure to Monte Carlo, Fama French, etc. will be assumed if you are looking for a finance position.
3. The next three bullets under relevant skills should be consolidated into a single bullet at the bottom of your resume (i.e. "Proficient in A, B, C...")
4. Same thing with languages: "Fluent in A and B, conversational in C and D". Do not say things like "Strong conversational skills", as statements like these should be demonstrated by your acquired skills.
5. Replace "Aptitude for contrarian trading strategies" with a bullet containing other interests, so that the bullet reads instead: "Other interests: trading (21% per annum returns), cooking, travel" (obviously replace with your actual interests). This should be the last thing on your resume.
6. Regarding your work experience: it seems you have some decent experience but you need to demonstrate value added through focusing much more on results. It is not enough to say that you spearheaded the design of a new distribution system- you need to be able to quantify the cost savings from this new system, efficiency gains, etc. The more numbers the better.
7. I would replace your summer stint at GS with something else as I don't see what it adds; if you don't have any other work experience at least insert the name of the company.
8. Do you have white space on the top and bottom of the page or is that just the pdf? A little bit is fine, but it looks like a full inch on either side.

Good luck.

 

[ViviTheMage]

seems to ... broad ...

 

[Farang]

Originally posted by: dirtboy
I am generally highly critical of resumes, and after seeing yours on bbzzdd.com and following the link, I must say it is very poorly done. What I see in your resume is someone who hasn't done much, hasn't had a significant impact on the projects or companies he's worked for, but thinks very highly of himself so he disguises his work in big words and carefully crafted vague sentences.

After reading it, I'm not sure what is is you do, what you want to do, or why you are remotely qualified to do whatever that is. Your past work history, rather then impress me, actually makes me think you are a glorified desk jockey. While you might be very intelligent and well qualified for something, and certainly you are based on your education, if this resume came across my desk, it wouldn't take more than 2 minutes before it found the trash.

A resume is about selling yourself to get an interview. The only thing I'm sold on after looking at yours is that I'm ready to look at the next one in the stack.

I'm not exactly sure what your criticism here is. You can't criticize his resume for not having experience, that is the person who lacks it. The most I get from what you are saying is that his attempts at glorifying less-than-stellar experience are blatant and untrustworthy. So his past work history doesn't impress you. . what does that have to do with the resume? That is his past work history, take it or leave it.

You sound as if you are critiquing this for a specific job with specific requirements that the OP is trying to meet. For all you know he could be applying at McDonald's. I find your criticism unnecessarily harsh, spiteful, and malicious.